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The Darkness
I’m thinking of starting a novel, but I could really use some help brainstorming ideas and themes. Here’s a quick summary of what I have in mind. If you have any suggestions on how to take this story further, I’d love to hear them! It’s going to be a sci-fi adventure about a professor who’s on a quest to uncover the secrets of the universe. But guess what? He’s not alone! A dark force is trying to show him what the universe really means, and it’s not going to be easy. He’ll have to face an ancient battle to learn the lessons he needs to find the answers he’s been searching for.
By Thomas Terryabout a year ago in Critique
All Saints Day
November 1st is All Saints Day and a day to remember all who have gone before to the get reward what is known as Heaven. To me this is the day that my older brother died, and this is a day that I think of him as I just did. Now on this day I remember him and now my mom and dad. This is a day that is sad, but yet happy for I know that one day we will see each other again just don't know when exactly, but till then I will remember them every day. Amen.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
WIP - Neverchangeable
The Premise: I've been struggling with this story for close to a year now. It was inspired by a customer who told me a story about his friend doing something illegal, even though he'd just become a father. The customer shook his head and said, "People never change. Not really."
By sleepy draftsabout a year ago in Critique
The Ersatz Elevator
Number Six of Lemony Snicket's series of the Baudelaire's. 'The Ersatz Elevator' find the children leaving Prufrock Prepatory School and living with Jerome and Esme in a very large apartment in a very tall building with a lot of rooms. What is 'In' and was is 'Out' is the question that Violet, Klaus and Sunny need to figure to save some friends and once again try to rid themselves of Count Olaf and could it happen down an elevator shaft or at an auction where people only want what is 'In'. More to come in this series of unfortunate events.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
The Notebook
On the desk is a stack of notebooks. Some are full of notes, and some are full of a little bit of everything from stories to poems to articles of various subjects. There are some that are empty and ready to be filled. What do you suppose should fill them? I know that some would start a possible novel or maybe a collection of short stories. At time I was thinking of a textbook dealing with American history for preschoolers or primary children. Yes, I am that writer with the stack of notebooks on my desk. What do you think?
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
The Austere Academy
'The Austere Academy' is volume 5 of the Lemony Snicket series. This is when the Baudelaire children entered Prufrock Preparatory School after leaving Lucky Smells Lumbermill. Prufrock Prep for the Baudelaire's could be when they did make two friends and on nasty enemy in the name of Carmelita Spats. Count Olaf is always around in some disguise that always seems to fool the adults around wherever Violet, Klaus and Sunny end up for a time. 'The Austere Academy' is one story that could make one think of sending your kids to a prep school, but schools are not that bad.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Sunday morning
Come rise with me and sing some praises to the Lord!
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Come Sunday Morning
Come Sunday morning you take a walk alone or with your companion in this case my dog. I am watching the sunrise rising over the horizon and seeing the sky turn from a light purple to almost a red. There is that old Navy saying, "Red skies in the morning, sailors take warning, Red skies in the evening Sailors rejoice. That is not the right word, but I could never remember that one word. Sunday a time to rest and rejoice for it's a day to say thanks to the Lord for another day or two or three or more.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
The Open Book
There on the table was an open book. As the people were walking around the room no one noticed what was sticking up from the middle. There was this one brave person that decided to go up to the desk and peek. At that moment a slight breeze fluttered the loose sheet to the floor. The person picked it up, looked at it, and read silently. The person couldn't believe what they read. "Please do not touch the book!" It is very fragile, and one cannot touch without gloves. Yes, this is story of a visit to a book museum.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Cornbread and Poppy at the Museum
'Poppy and Cornbread at the museum is a beginning chapter book for young readers. Who wouldn't enjoy reading and sharing a story of two adorable mice that is written by Matthew Cordell. In the small village of Moonville there are two mice who are totally different but are best friends, but there is a secret in this tiny village that involves these two best friends. Technically the story is told where the words and the pictures tell the story each its own way.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
