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Sunshine
Blinding Orb Light sight seen
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Library
Knowledge pursuits ideas writing Readers
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Fireworks
Loud Colorful Sparkling Ingenuity Boom!
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
thunderstorm
Dark ominous mighty storm provocative
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Just look at me.
"Just look at me. I wish I remembered what happened to me." I was sitting on a blanket with my child and all of a sudden a big something came after me. "I kind of remember sharp teeth, but who did the teeth belong to I wondered. While looking around I saw my kid who seemed to have tears running down her face and all I could not help her. What was happening to me and the sharp teeth. They did hurt, but I knew that my kid well I hoped would start yelling just a little louder. Mommy help!
By Mark Graham2 years ago in Critique
Just look at me 2
Mommy came a running out of the house and yelled at the thing that had me with its' teeth. The thing dropped me right then and I saw that my leg seemed to have a hole, and I felt funny a few other places too. The mommy and my kid were now going into the house and the mommy was getting ready to do something. I hope whatever doesn't hurt. My kid started to smile a little and mommy said "Mr. Bear should be good as new in a few days and we will check his hurts in a bit."
By Mark Graham2 years ago in Critique
Wyoming
Here is my critique on 'Wyoming' the third installment of the Wagons West series by Dana Fuller Ross. This part of the series picks up when the wagon train is just about to enter the Rocky Mountains right in time for the winter season. Whip, Cathy, and all the others will have to learn how to survive the season and how to deal when one feels 'cabin fever' along with meeting a few new people joining the train. There is on woman who can see the future at times, as well as two that come up from California way. There are various relationships that will see differences during this winter season in a place named Little Valley. The train is very close to their objective now.
By Mark Graham2 years ago in Critique
Woman and Cat
Here I lie naked beside my cat. The cat is my protector of all things including myself. The cat never sleeps while I sleep. Sometimes I think what does that cat think about during the night while he is on watch. So much to ponder about when one has a pet who loves you so much that they will do anything for you. The cat never flinches through the night for I have awakened once or twice, but never moved for I did not want to disturb him and his duty to me at night he shows his love too.
By Mark Graham2 years ago in Critique
Where Are We Going?!
"Where do you think you're taking me?" he said. Just want to share that my arm is really hurting. "Can you hear me?" "I do not think this adult can understand me." I know I was out in the yard a long time, and I hope you are taking me back to my kid. I really miss him. Bear and adult kept walking and walking. Bear looked around and around no kid yet. The adult said something, and my kid came out of the house and a big smile was on his face so big that I smiled at him.
By Mark Graham2 years ago in Critique
